英语写作指导及范文——月球旅游

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英语写作指导及范文——月球旅游:要求学生充分发挥自己的想象力,写作时可以有选择地使用一些参考资料。文章共分为两个部分,分别写月球旅游的内容和感受。两个部分要衔接流畅,逻辑严谨。 文章所使用的时态应为一般将来时。人称以第一人称为宜。

  Tomorrow’s World

  写作指导


  写作任务:

  假如你是李丽,你将代表你们学校参加2008年国际中学生文化交流节,活动的主题是"未来在我们手中"。请你发挥自己的想象力拟一份关于月球旅游的报告。报告中要写明月球旅游的内容以及它会给人们带来什么感受。可参考以下信息:

  目前月球的环形山中,共有五座以中国人的名字命名的,它们是石申环形山、张衡环形山、祖冲之环形山、郭守敬环形山和万户环形山。科学家建议进行一次登月旅行,到月球上的巨大的陨石坑中收集岩石样本,来研究月球上未知生命的痕迹。

  参考词汇:

  环形山ring mountain n.

  陨石坑cloud stone pit n.

  写作分析:

  写作任务是以"月球旅游"为主题,对未来进行设想,是一篇开放性作文。

  要求学生充分发挥自己的想象力,写作时可以有选择地使用一些参考资料。文章共分为两个部分,分别写月球旅游的内容和感受。两个部分要衔接流畅,逻辑严谨。

  文章所使用的时态应为一般将来时。人称以第一人称为宜。

  初稿:

  My dear friends,

  Tourism is developing very fast, and I am sure that in future the spaceship will manage to send people to have a travel on the moon. There are five ring mountains named after Chinese people, such as Zhang Heng ring mountain, Zu Chongzhi ring mountain, and so on. So we are certain to travel there. Besides, we will visit the huge cloud stone pit to take some stones so that we can study the unknown life on the moon. It is certain that moon travel will be very exciting. Besides, it must be very helpful for human beings to know more about the moon and the universe, and it may help us build our future home there. That’s all. Thank you.


  教师点评:

  本篇短文基本覆盖了写作任务要求的内容,写出了月球旅游的内容和感受。所使用的词汇和语法结构也基本能满足写作要求。但仍存在一些不足:1. 文章的开头部分有些唐突,缺少过渡性话语。2. 在旅游内容方面,没有适当地发挥,所以使得文章的内容不太充实。

  成稿:

  My dear friends,

  I believe that one day human beings will travel to the moon in spaceships just as easily as we fly to other countries now. On the moon, people in space suits will climb mountains, and enjoy the beautiful full view of the earth. Tour guides will take us to see cloud stone pits which may give us some clues of the origins of life. People will also be able to visit Guanghan Palace, and meet Chang’e and her rabbit, just like in the Chinese fairy tale. Traveling to the moon will be very exciting. It will also help us learn more about the moon and the universe. After we learn more about the moon, it will be possible for us to build homes on the moon too. That’s all. Thank you.

  教师点评:

  此文结构清晰,想象合理,内容充实,所使用的语法结构准确自然。对旅游内容进行了适当发挥。我们从小常听嫦娥玉兔的故事,中国的嫦娥一号又成功登月,这些都可以是我们写作灵感的源泉,使文章更加生动。

  Powerful Sentences:

  1. Because of the rapid development of technology, our world will change a lot in many ways in the future.

  2. To our great joy, it is now getting easier for us to travel outside of the earth and go to places such as the moon.

  3. What will the world be like in the future? We can only guess, but we can be sure that it will be much different from what it is today.

  4. Scientists are finding new ways to make houses for us to live in.

  5. Many changes are on the way for people in the near future.

  巩固练习:

  假如你是英国的中学生Lucy,你每天看到妈妈在厨房里忙碌的身影,觉得她很辛苦。于是你想象如果有一台能做饭的机器送给妈妈那该多好。请你给妈妈写一封信,把你的愿望告诉她。


  本期写作指导参考范文


  Dear Mum,

  Thank you for loving and supporting me. I feel very happy to see you at home when I come back after school every day. At the same time I often feel sorry when I see you cooking and doing other housework. You must be tired. How I wish I could invent a cooking machine and give it to you as a gift!This machine would cook all kinds of delicious food. All you would need to do is buy all of the things that are needed for the dish and then tell it how to cook the meal. In that way, cooking will be very easy and relaxing and you will never be tired again. Then you will have more time to be with us. Wouldn’t that be great? I’m sure it will happen one day.

  Your daughter, Lucy


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